To Dorm or Not To Dorm

Thesis statement: Student should live in a rented house.

First argument: The cost of living in a rented house is cheaper than in the dormitory.

Second argument: By living in the rented house, students will learn more about freedom and responsibility.

Third argument: By living in the rented house, students will be more prepared for the real world.

Counter argument: Living in the dormitory is much safer than living in a rented house.

Conclusion: Living in a rented house is much more beneficial.

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To Dorm or Not to Dorm

Do you want to get a full experience of your college life? Have you ever curious of what would real life be? Do you want to learn how to be more self-independent and responsible? If the answers are yes, you should pack your things up and move out from your dormitory and rent a house. Why? Because based on my experience, I strongly believe that by living outside the dormitory, it would give you a full experience of your college life. Besides that, there are so many advantages that living outside the dormitory could give you, for the starters, the cost of living in a rented house is much cheaper than in the dormitory, the second, by living in a rented house you will learn more about freedom and responsibility, and the last, you will be more prepared for the real world. Not convincing yet? Let me elaborate more down here.

  Firstly, the cost of living in a rented house is cheaper than in the dormitory. Here is the bitter fact, everyone knows that college is very expensive. And if you decide to live in the dormitory, usually the cost of living in the dormitory is almost as expensive as the college tuition itself. Why not cut down the expenses by renting a house near the campus and split it with your friend? That way you both could save up your money for other purposes. Another benefit by renting a house is if you’re this lazy or busy student who unable to cook your own meal, you can buy it near your rented house. Usually, the food that sold near the rented house is far cheaper and diverse than the food that sold in the City Walk near the dormitory. Therefore, living in a rented house with your friend could save up your money much more.

Secondly, by living in a rented house, you will learn more about freedom and responsibility. Living in a rented house is also means freedom. Free to manage and decorate your own place however you like it, free to choose whomever you want to live with, and also the most precious freedom is free to use the bathroom for as long as you like it. But be careful, with freedom comes responsibility. Just like what Eleanor Roosevelt said, Freedom makes a huge requirement of every human being. With freedom comes responsibility. For the person who is unwilling to grow up, the person who does not want to carry is own weight, this is a frightening prospect. There will be many responsibilities that you would carry if you choose to live in a rented house. For example, you have to pay your own electricity bill, you have to do grocery shopping, you have to clean your own room since there is no cleaning service, and you have to make sure your place is safe from any thieves since usually there is no security service in a rented house. So, by living in a rented house, you’ll learn more about responsibility to yourself because if you’re not being responsible, you will be the one who gets the result of it.

Last but not least, you will be more prepared for the real world. In the real world, you cannot be dependent on somebody even to your parents because they would not be by your side for a lifetime. If you’re not prepared for it, you will be shocked and unable to survive once you live on your own. By living in a rented house, it will give you such a warms-up to the real world. Just like what I have said before that living in a rented house comes with so many responsibilities. Sure those activities are time-consuming and tiresome, but that’s what you’ll do once you really live by your own support. Later, when you finally get to live the real world without your parents support, you will not get shocked, since you have been there before and even you will know how to survive in the real world.

Many students think living in the dormitory is much safer than living in a rented house because we know that dormitory provides the students with a security service. However, based on my experience of living in a dormitory for two years, there are still many cases of theft. In my opinion, it’s not about where you live or how you live your life, the risk and danger will always by your side. In the real world itself, there will be no one who able to protect you all the time. You have to take care of yourself and protect your own-self, because if it’s not you, then who else? That’s why by living in a rented house, you will learn more about how important is self-independent and self-responsibility.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that by living in a rented house, could give the students much more benefits than living in the dormitory. By living in a rented house, the students will learn more about how important is self-independent and responsibility. College is an important phase for young-adult to shape their mind. By experiencing living in a rented house, it could give the students some experiences and lessons of life. By which those experiences and lessons would shape their characteristics, and make them ready for the real world.

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9 thoughts on “To Dorm or Not To Dorm

  1. Immanuel Christian says:

    Hi Gio,
    Nice post I think, maybe my advice is to give a citation on “warm-up” words on “it will give you such a warms-up to the real world.” since it will possibly confuse the reader. overall it’s good points you’ve made and I strongly agree with your opinion.

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  2. dickiesdiaries says:

    Hi Gio ! Seems happy to see your new post here ! You start the essay by preparing so much questions needed to be answered, and I’d love the way you do it.
    I just feel your arguments are not really supported with good supporting sentences. You do more “giving opinion” as a weapon to support your arguments, but I think you also need data such as facts/statistics about student who live in the dorm this recenr years, or you can also provide personal experience from students who live inside dorm and rented house, to make it become a strong paragraph.

    I think that’s all from me. Keep writing Gio ! I will wait for your another post :))

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  3. adstory30 says:

    Hi gio!
    As always, your post is amazing! I really like to read your post. It’s good that you put you experience as one of supporting argument, since it shows that you didn’t just said the things in bias. Your post seems spotless and it kinda hard to find a mistake in your post. But maybe I would like to suggest that in “if you’re this lazy or” you might cut the “this” word to make it clearer. I think that’s all! Looking forward for your next post!!

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  4. Aura Kartika says:

    Hi, Gio. I have a suggestion just a tiny one in the fourth paragraph.
    “it will give you such a warms-up to the real world” the warms-up word I think it should be better with ((warm-up)) without ‘s’ according to grammar, if I’m not mistaken.

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  5. adilamjournal says:

    Hi Gio,
    It is nice argument you post but I found things that need to be revised:
    – In your introductory paragraph, you are not organized it like general to specific what I mean you need make the paragraph in structure of attention getter first, Lead-in and specificly your thesis statement.
    I thinks that is only I can suggest I hope you will think it again.
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  6. ajipampam says:

    Hi Gio!
    Your writing is awesome as always
    But let me give some suggestions:

    Your argumentative paragraph is actually according to the content. From the second paragraph to the fourth paragraph you mention in a structural way and in the fifth paragraph you mention about counter argument and rebuttal. But in introductory paragraph you dont mention it clearly like you need attention getter, lead in and thesis statement.

    I think that’s all Gio!
    Thank you!

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  7. Elisindreamland says:

    Hi Gio!! Your writing is amazing as always. You can elaborate your word nicely, so the readers can understand your writings easily. I do agree that living in rent house is make us learn more about freedom and responsibilities. By the way, I have some suggestions that can make your paragraph become more awesome
    1.3rd paragraph: “……whomever you want to live with, and also the most…” >>>> “whomever you want to live with, and the most…..”
    2.4th paragraph : “…you cannot be dependent on….” >>>> “…you cannot depend on….”
    That’s all from me. Correct me if I’m wrong because I’m still learning. 🙂

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  8. ferdinandzip says:

    Hello Gioo,

    I’ve read your post and I found it to be a great writing. Yaa you have a good way in writing and it seems you have become blogger hahaha
    About the content, I like it and its already great. for the grammar, I believe in you hehe
    There are 2 notes that I want to let you know, If you are writing an essay, the Introduction should be written from 3 or 4 sentences. Don’t write too much, cause you can lose from your topic and it can also make reader hard to get the point and less attracted the reader.
    Then, you need to balance the length of each paragraph. for the better composition for me hahahaha…

    Hope this help. Good luck ^.^

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  9. Patricia Giovani says:

    [REVISED]

    Thesis statement: Student should live in a rented house.
    First argument: The cost of living in a rented house is cheaper than in the dormitory.
    Second argument: Student will learn more about freedom and responsibility.
    Third argument: Student will be more prepared for the real world.
    Counter argument: Living in the dormitory is much safer than living in a rented house.
    Conclusion: Living in a rented house is much more beneficial.

    To Dorm or Not to Dorm.

    Do you want to get a full experience of your college life? Have you ever curious of what would real life be? If the answers are yes, you should pack your things up and move out from your dormitory and rent a house. Why? Because based on my experience, I strongly believe that by living outside the dormitory, it would give you a full experience of your college life. Besides that, there are so many advantages that living outside the dormitory could give you, for the starters, the cost of living in a rented house is much cheaper than in the dormitory, the second, by living in a rented house you will learn more about freedom and responsibility, and the last, you will be more prepared for the real world. Let me elaborate more down here.

    Firstly, the cost of living in a rented house is cheaper than in the dormitory. Here is the bitter fact, everyone knows that college is very expensive. And if you decide to live in the dormitory, here in President University, the rent price for dormitory could exceed 1.4 million per month. Compared with the rent price of a rented house approximately it’s only 1 million per month. From this perspective, if you choose to live in a rented house, you can save up your money for other purposes. Another benefit of renting a house is if you’re lazy or busy at the moment and unable to cook your own meal, you can buy it near your rented house. Usually, the food that sold near the rented house is far cheaper and diverse than the food that sold in the City Walk near the dormitory. Therefore, living in a rented house could save up your money much more.

    Secondly, by living in a rented house, you will learn more about freedom and responsibility. Living in a rented house is also means freedom. Free to manage and decorate your own place however you like it and free to choose whomever you want to live with. But be careful, with freedom comes responsibility. Just like what Eleanor Roosevelt said, “Freedom makes a huge requirement of every human being. With freedom comes responsibility. For the person who is unwilling to grow up, the person who does not want to carry is own weight, this is a frightening prospect.” There will be many responsibilities that you would carry if you choose to live in a rented house. For example, you have to pay your own electricity bill, you have to do grocery shopping, you have to clean your own room since there is no cleaning service, and you have to make sure your place is safe from any thieves since usually there is no security service in a rented house. So, by living in a rented house, you’ll learn more about responsibility to yourselves because if you’re not being responsible, you will be the one who gets the result of it.

    Last but not least, you will be more prepared for the real world. In the real world, you cannot be dependent to somebody even to your parents, because they would not be by your side for a lifetime. If you’re not prepared for it, you will be shocked and unable to survive once you live on your own. By living in a rented house, it will give you such a warm-up to the real world. Just like what I have said before that living in a rented house comes with so many responsibilities. Sure those activities are time-consuming and tiresome, but that’s what you’ll do once you really live by your own support. Later, when you finally get to live the real world without your parents support, you will not get shocked, since you have been there before and even you will know how to survive in the real world.

    Many students think living in the dormitory is much safer than living on your own in a rented house because we know that dormitory provides the students with a security service. However, based on my experience of living in a dormitory for two years, there are still many cases of theft. In my opinion, it’s not about where you live or how you live your life, the risk and danger will always by your side. In the real world itself, there will be no one who able to protect you all the time. You have to take care of yourself and protect your own self, because if it’s not you, then who else? That’s why by living in a rented house, you will learn more about how important is self-independent and self-responsibility.

    In conclusion, I strongly believe that by living in a rented house, could give the students much more benefits than living in the dormitory. By living in a rented house, the students will learn more about how important is self-independent and responsibility. College is an important phase for young-adult to shape their mind. By experiencing living in a rented house, it could give the students some experiences and lessons of life. By which those experiences and lessons would shape their characteristics, and make them ready for the real world.

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